01-16-2012, 01:25 PM
leanne-
was considering using the possessive of rifle but chose not to. the reason: i want the rifle to be "raised horizontally," not the shadow. do you think it would be clear enough as an image if I switch it to "rifle's shadow"? additionally, agree with your input on "when". that's wonderful that the piece led you to such ponderings; you've gone places i hadn't even considered and that is always refreshing
abu-
never thought of putting this to music, which certainly changes some aspects of it for me. for now i'm going to sit on the suggestion for the last stanza; it's a good something to mull over.
erthona-
reading your words, i couldn't help but agree with what you have said. thanks for taking the time to read, it is much appreciated
was considering using the possessive of rifle but chose not to. the reason: i want the rifle to be "raised horizontally," not the shadow. do you think it would be clear enough as an image if I switch it to "rifle's shadow"? additionally, agree with your input on "when". that's wonderful that the piece led you to such ponderings; you've gone places i hadn't even considered and that is always refreshing
abu-
never thought of putting this to music, which certainly changes some aspects of it for me. for now i'm going to sit on the suggestion for the last stanza; it's a good something to mull over.
erthona-
reading your words, i couldn't help but agree with what you have said. thanks for taking the time to read, it is much appreciated
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