01-13-2012, 10:31 AM
"You mentioned obsessions being referred to as women commonly. Does this weaken my poem and make it cliche?"
No, since you are personifying "Obsession" and not addiction, I think it works well. Here you are talking about a specific aspect of addiction, obsession, and obsession can also refer to something outside of addition. Personally, I would like to see you flesh out "her" personality a little more as I think this could develop into something larger, but that may be something far a later time.
Dale
No, since you are personifying "Obsession" and not addiction, I think it works well. Here you are talking about a specific aspect of addiction, obsession, and obsession can also refer to something outside of addition. Personally, I would like to see you flesh out "her" personality a little more as I think this could develop into something larger, but that may be something far a later time.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.