From young to old

[Philatone]

hey! some quick comments:

we're getting uglier
greyer, blacker
from smooth to rough ..enjoyed the images! think this was among the strongest!

in the beginning
we can't stop laughing
but at the end
we laugh while we cry..I wasn't fully sure how this fits your other stanzas. not sure it is needed

ripples
numbers we can't count
wrinkles
climbing over our skin ..I think you expressed this well

and they say
that we have to fail
to start again
let's begin with failing
so we can come again
to where we came from..like the idea! i think you could do without the last two lines

pour the young blood
over our everlasting pain
recreate from the ashes
a newborn warm life ...I think the "blood" is a stronger image than you want for this stanza/poem

I liked reading this, I think you expressed it well