Ray, thanks, thinking your comments over for now... but the last one seems odd to me because when I read it aloud, I don't stress "can" at all -- I read it as:
but i DON'T/ think i can BREATHE
or at a pinch, I can stretch it to iambs I guess, as long as there's an anapaest to start:
but i DON'T/ think I/ can BREATHE
then an anapaest for "underGROUND" to close on a strong stress.
To me it's the "breathe" that's important, maybe I should record it and see how it sounds.
but i DON'T/ think i can BREATHE
or at a pinch, I can stretch it to iambs I guess, as long as there's an anapaest to start:
but i DON'T/ think I/ can BREATHE
then an anapaest for "underGROUND" to close on a strong stress.
To me it's the "breathe" that's important, maybe I should record it and see how it sounds.
It could be worse