01-11-2012, 11:08 PM
no constructive crit here. loved the last two lines which were excellent.
some good stuff going on. rhyme scheme as usual for you were spot on.
the bruising tongue didn't work really well for me as an image, but that's just a nit.
it read like a good well rounded sonnet.
thanks for the read.
some good stuff going on. rhyme scheme as usual for you were spot on.
the bruising tongue didn't work really well for me as an image, but that's just a nit.
it read like a good well rounded sonnet.
thanks for the read.
