01-11-2012, 11:06 AM
This revision reads more clearly to me, especially the first three stanzas.
Hate to disagree with Billy,
"but fragmented honesty"
seems one of the best lines in the poem, and really puts in clear relief what is being juxtaposed:
wholeness--honesty
A poet comes to the truth through self honesty, and self honesty through a deflation of the ego. Deflating the ego leaves scars on our psyche from admitting the stupidity, and foolishness of our actions, and the idiocy of cherished beliefs. These are the sacrifices required to reach greater levels of self honest. Self-centeredness and egoism must be pushed aside, at least temporarily, if we are going to come to an awareness of the truth. The person who would heal us, haven't a clue what they are trying to do. This is in addition to the fact that they are not doing for us, but for themselves, because these things make them uncomfortable. It is fear being practiced under the guise of kindness, and there is no consideration given to the thought of whether or not this "healing" will be beneficial to the one receiving it. It should be noted that manslaughter still carries with it a penalty despite the fact that the action was unintended.
Dale
Hate to disagree with Billy,
"but fragmented honesty"
seems one of the best lines in the poem, and really puts in clear relief what is being juxtaposed:
wholeness--honesty
A poet comes to the truth through self honesty, and self honesty through a deflation of the ego. Deflating the ego leaves scars on our psyche from admitting the stupidity, and foolishness of our actions, and the idiocy of cherished beliefs. These are the sacrifices required to reach greater levels of self honest. Self-centeredness and egoism must be pushed aside, at least temporarily, if we are going to come to an awareness of the truth. The person who would heal us, haven't a clue what they are trying to do. This is in addition to the fact that they are not doing for us, but for themselves, because these things make them uncomfortable. It is fear being practiced under the guise of kindness, and there is no consideration given to the thought of whether or not this "healing" will be beneficial to the one receiving it. It should be noted that manslaughter still carries with it a penalty despite the fact that the action was unintended.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.