01-06-2012, 07:08 AM
If this is bumping then BUMP BUMP BUMP 
I have been working on this one for a while because I was never able to get the feeling I wanted into it. I did a (nearly) complete rewrite. (I edited the OP, but because of pagination I'm posting it here also for easy access):
Daughter of lust claim me.
I expire in you
and breathe in your cloud
of jet black pain
Pressing me down into a hole,
shovel in hand--
I dig you
down.
Not drowning, worshiping the water I inhale . . .
I inhale you
and exhale all of me,
but still you leave me
weaker than before.

I have been working on this one for a while because I was never able to get the feeling I wanted into it. I did a (nearly) complete rewrite. (I edited the OP, but because of pagination I'm posting it here also for easy access):
Daughter of lust claim me.
I expire in you
and breathe in your cloud
of jet black pain
Pressing me down into a hole,
shovel in hand--
I dig you
down.
Not drowning, worshiping the water I inhale . . .
I inhale you
and exhale all of me,
but still you leave me
weaker than before.

