Askew

[rayheinrich]

Finally! A nice, straight-forward poem from you.
(I liketh it muy muchly.)

I'm stealing the concept of "fragmented honesty" for myself.
(An imaginative Frankenstein/Prometheus et. al. ref.)

If I were intrinsically evil, I'd change the snake metaphors to bat
and throw in some "Twilight" references...

Since I like to read it as an internal discussion, I think a bit of
ambiguity as to 'person' is called for.

Not many quibbles:
   While it should really be "close-woven", I can just see
   having "cross-eyed", "close-woven", and "gray-shadowed"
   one after the other, so I understand.

   I would prefer a bit more anatomical accuracy, but, this being
   poetry and all...

   "Lethe": well, don't get me started. While I personally dislike
   anyone younger than 120 resorting to Greek allusionism, I am
   willing to put up with it as long as they forgive my unremitting
   drug metaphorizationizing.

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grannyjill said: "I am very interested in why a poet would not wish to clarify something in a poem."

There are lots of reasons. One of my favs is that it's a good way to
invite readers into your poem by letting them shape parts of the poem
to suite themselves.


grannyjill said: "I also don't naturally write poetry which consists of layers"

Actually, it's impossible to write poetry that doesn't have layers as no
method of communication is accurate enough not to produce them.