01-01-2012, 03:47 AM
hi everyone
thank you so much for the feedbacks!
the 'those rude heartless' means that the person who reads it can fill it in by theirselves, (maybe 'those rude heartless thoughts)
@mark I don't understand the difference between 'can't' and 'couldn't', but I think that's because I can't speak english very well..
I can't see "tis"?
@erthona. yes there still needs a noun and the person who reads it can fill it in..
@grannyjill hmm I think 'the rude heartless' would be better... thank you
oh and:
"Generally it reads smoothly. I don't understand he use of 'Till, since you are not using a meter on this."
the voices scream, but after a while the screaming doesn't make sense. So that means that the screaming is senseless. The screaming is equal to the silence, because the screaming doesn't add anything after a while and well, the silence also adds nothing.
thank you so much for the feedbacks!
the 'those rude heartless' means that the person who reads it can fill it in by theirselves, (maybe 'those rude heartless thoughts)
@mark I don't understand the difference between 'can't' and 'couldn't', but I think that's because I can't speak english very well..
I can't see "tis"?
@erthona. yes there still needs a noun and the person who reads it can fill it in..
@grannyjill hmm I think 'the rude heartless' would be better... thank you
oh and:
"Generally it reads smoothly. I don't understand he use of 'Till, since you are not using a meter on this."
the voices scream, but after a while the screaming doesn't make sense. So that means that the screaming is senseless. The screaming is equal to the silence, because the screaming doesn't add anything after a while and well, the silence also adds nothing.
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