12-31-2011, 03:36 PM
Although it generally falls in iambs, I was probably writing it as accentual verse, so this is how I read the stresses. Stressed syllables in bold.
"The time between here and there\"
"Betwixt" is probably in keeping with the wording, and the way I read it I still have four stresses per line.
"The time betwixt here and there\"
Would "The time betwixt the here and there" be better?
That changes it to straight iambs, but seems to create problem for the following lines because the next line starts on a half foot, or truncated head if you will.
The time betwixt the here and there
is a time too long I fear,
I never again will hear her sing,
(for) I shall not last until the Spring.
After awhile I start losing how I would read it, as opposed of how I should read it, I know when this happens because my eyes cross
I'll take on the betwixt (thanks that was a good idea, and it is very Ted like), but I don't know about making it straight iambs, as I still read it as a four foot line without the extra syllable.
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GJ
Yeah, anyone who thinks they will make money off of poetry needs a reality check. Even Ginsberg didn't make a living off of his poetry, he made it from appearances. Actually, I'm not sure who has ever made a living solely off of poetry. Most either taught, or made paid appearances. The only people making money off of poetry is poetry.com and Hallmark, and calling what either promote poetry is a bit iffy.
Dale
"The time between here and there\"
"Betwixt" is probably in keeping with the wording, and the way I read it I still have four stresses per line.
"The time betwixt here and there\"
Would "The time betwixt the here and there" be better?
That changes it to straight iambs, but seems to create problem for the following lines because the next line starts on a half foot, or truncated head if you will.
The time betwixt the here and there
is a time too long I fear,
I never again will hear her sing,
(for) I shall not last until the Spring.
After awhile I start losing how I would read it, as opposed of how I should read it, I know when this happens because my eyes cross
I'll take on the betwixt (thanks that was a good idea, and it is very Ted like), but I don't know about making it straight iambs, as I still read it as a four foot line without the extra syllable.
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GJ
Yeah, anyone who thinks they will make money off of poetry needs a reality check. Even Ginsberg didn't make a living off of his poetry, he made it from appearances. Actually, I'm not sure who has ever made a living solely off of poetry. Most either taught, or made paid appearances. The only people making money off of poetry is poetry.com and Hallmark, and calling what either promote poetry is a bit iffy.
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.