12-29-2011, 10:27 PM
Who is Ted...is it Ted Hughes? I don't know his work very well...I read 'Crow' but it was a long time ago.
This may sound insulting, it's not meant to be - this verse sounds old-fashioned. It has an olde worlde atmosphere, simple word choice and a lilting even cadence. Even the subject matter speaks of a simpler time.
I like it.
The punctuation of the following does need a little attention,
my suggestions here could probably be improved upon by you.
Yes. Death, whom I once feared,
when living life was still so dear.
Yet, now I only beg of him,
take me to my home again.
Yes! Take me to my home once more,
This may sound insulting, it's not meant to be - this verse sounds old-fashioned. It has an olde worlde atmosphere, simple word choice and a lilting even cadence. Even the subject matter speaks of a simpler time.
I like it.
The punctuation of the following does need a little attention,
my suggestions here could probably be improved upon by you.
Yes. Death, whom I once feared,
when living life was still so dear.
Yet, now I only beg of him,
take me to my home again.
Yes! Take me to my home once more,