12-29-2011, 08:33 PM
GJ (simple soul and waverer),
"May I do my picky bit, quickly, then depart?"
only if you don't fart!
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Yes, I do mean also.
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If "its joyous song, its manifest, its end" is a replacement suggestion, it wouldn't work as it is in a completely different meter than the poem is written in.
Let me give a little explanation. The wording is as it is because it is suppose to be him speaking, and this was how he tended to write poetry, basically a bit archaic and disjointed. The idea is that through the language you will become aware of the personality underlying it. In my minds eye, if he were an actor on stage, speaking a soliloquy, which is also a lament as he is about to die, this is how I see him saying it.
Thanks for your thoughts,
Dale
"May I do my picky bit, quickly, then depart?"
only if you don't fart!
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Yes, I do mean also.
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If "its joyous song, its manifest, its end" is a replacement suggestion, it wouldn't work as it is in a completely different meter than the poem is written in.
Let me give a little explanation. The wording is as it is because it is suppose to be him speaking, and this was how he tended to write poetry, basically a bit archaic and disjointed. The idea is that through the language you will become aware of the personality underlying it. In my minds eye, if he were an actor on stage, speaking a soliloquy, which is also a lament as he is about to die, this is how I see him saying it.
Thanks for your thoughts,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.