12-29-2011, 05:04 PM
Are you American, Aish?
In the UK the Head Cheese, or the Big Cheese is an expression to refer to The Boss Man.
As always with your verse, I struggle, usually in vain, to understand your words....and this is no exception. Honestly, without reading Leanne's crit I should be in the dark. 'The soft burn' - nope, no idea...the rest of this bit is presumably a bottle of something opened and poured?
The soft burn screams my name
encased in glass, woken up
and shaken.
Don't know what is over. Don't know who 'I' is, whether the 'I' is draped in silks and richly possessed of Abaddon or the banquet. (Abaddon I would have looked up but Leanne saved me the trouble)
Already over,
I'm late to the banquet
draped in silks and richly possessed
of Abaddon.
Okay with this bit (prim maxims again Leanne saved me the trouble of looking this up)
Drink the wine.
It's voyage speaks of prim maxims (Its)
and obscene fruit.
Eat, eat my love
and fatten your teeth;..........never heard of fat teeth, ever before.
the throne is empty. Don't know whose throne, or what this has to do with the previous lines.
So, there you are......your pearls were cast before swine. I apologise for being such a dumbo and a disappointing audience. But, there is no point in my pretending otherwise.
In the UK the Head Cheese, or the Big Cheese is an expression to refer to The Boss Man.
As always with your verse, I struggle, usually in vain, to understand your words....and this is no exception. Honestly, without reading Leanne's crit I should be in the dark. 'The soft burn' - nope, no idea...the rest of this bit is presumably a bottle of something opened and poured?
The soft burn screams my name
encased in glass, woken up
and shaken.
Don't know what is over. Don't know who 'I' is, whether the 'I' is draped in silks and richly possessed of Abaddon or the banquet. (Abaddon I would have looked up but Leanne saved me the trouble)
Already over,
I'm late to the banquet
draped in silks and richly possessed
of Abaddon.
Okay with this bit (prim maxims again Leanne saved me the trouble of looking this up)
Drink the wine.
It's voyage speaks of prim maxims (Its)
and obscene fruit.
Eat, eat my love
and fatten your teeth;..........never heard of fat teeth, ever before.
the throne is empty. Don't know whose throne, or what this has to do with the previous lines.
So, there you are......your pearls were cast before swine. I apologise for being such a dumbo and a disappointing audience. But, there is no point in my pretending otherwise.