Sculpture

[Wildcard]

I am a fan! I missed the first version(sorry guys I am trying to get my head back in the game) and now it seems that the ship is safely in the harbor. So, I'll just tell you that I really like the way the revision stands out from the original. The last line with it's repetition made me start all over. Maybe I was day-dreaming the first time through, but then when I re-read the poem with the last line in mind, I could see so much more.

Thanks for sharing.

P.S. You and others here give me feedback that helps so much. Maybe I could just send you money through PayPal because I can't seem to find enough to say about your work. Its hard for me to critique those who I think are way better than me(like everybody I know :p)