mango

[popeye]

Thanks very much for the comments and example Leanne, the poem is about a young couple who move out to a bush block and try to start a mango orchard, she works in an office in the city while he tries to set up the farm, and in a fit of loneliness he grabs a mango.............

But it started to get a bit convoluted and untidy!

Yielding is nice, much better!

Do you think perhaps 'bouquet's' might flow better?

Love what you did with the second stanza, its brevity works well to introduce the rest of the poem!

Really I couldn't do any better than that Leanne so reckon I might just leave it that!

Cheers, jiminy