12-24-2011, 06:19 AM
Hi Jill,
Playing catchup isn't exactly easy around here!
You've done somethin here that I have never been able to figure out: Walking the fine line between narrative and being too telly.
Reading along, I felt a little disoriented by the last line. Everything seems nostalgic, but the last line seems purposefully dreary- maybe that was the intent but imo it just doesn't quite fit. Of course I have been wrong before.
Thanks for sharing
Playing catchup isn't exactly easy around here!
You've done somethin here that I have never been able to figure out: Walking the fine line between narrative and being too telly.Reading along, I felt a little disoriented by the last line. Everything seems nostalgic, but the last line seems purposefully dreary- maybe that was the intent but imo it just doesn't quite fit. Of course I have been wrong before.
Thanks for sharing