Velvet Elvis

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Hi Erthona,
We haven't officially met. I'm the neighborhood hillbilly and I want to be clear from the start that I know very little about poetry. It's good to see you posting, for sure. This piece left me with a smile on my face, so no matter what you label it- it's a winner. There were a few things I took a second look at, but most of all I just kept getting the feeling that it was a little straight-forward. I don't mean to sound mean, but parts of it felt like an article in an e-zine(a very well-written, charming article). Like I said, I am an extreme amateur and I could be way off on that one. Here's my take:

…and yes, there are many, --it feels a little awkward at first. I didn't know what was going on. And yes, what?
when it comes to poetry,
who can think only of that
abbreviated writing as such,
which conforms to a certain metered line,
a certain form it must endure, --love the use of endure. imo it gives a certain attitude
and, of course, it ab-so-lut-ly has to rhyme. --again, good work, but you forgot the 'e' absolutely.
But then,
there are those,
also,
and this,
not to be unkind,
who think that Velvet Elvis
is the highest form of art.
After all, is it not paint,
and is there not a canvas?
Granted, it is inky black,
not blandly white,
but who are you to say,
that they are wrong,
and you are right?
Isn’t this idea of yours just conceit?
Is beauty not,
in the apprehension of that form,
that pleases he who gazes?
Why should Velvet Elvis not be the norm?
I bet more have been painted (and sold),
Than any by that guy, Go-gan, or was it,
Bland-go?
Well, who they are doesn’t matter,
if it were important,
to me,
I’m sure that I would know!
So, with that said,
I have this poem I wrote,
it really is a hum-dinger,
it came to me the other day
while I was watching Oprah,
or was it Jerry Springer?
What?
Oh no,
I’ve never written one before,
but anyone one can do it, --I was thrilled when you didn't rhyme 'do it' with 'to it'. A little fear came rushing at me when I saw it, but you took it in a much less sensible direction
it just has to rhyme.
I mean, its nothing that hard,
or that requires practice,
it’s nothing so difficult as say, --I'm not a punctuation genius so I may be wrong, but I think an ellipsis or hyphen would server as a better lead-in to a great final line.
painting a Velvet Elvis.

©2011 ~Erthona

Now as to the subject or subjectivity, I think you make a valid point in an amusing way. Cheers! Thanks for sharing.