12-07-2011, 01:06 PM
Liked the poem (ok, maybe not "bully-boy seas").
I especially liked the restaurants. It definitely contains
enough imagery to escape "telly". Personally, I think "telly"
ain't that bad. Writers that get caught up in the "show,
don't tell" thing often end up sounding like salesmen.
Telling imparts an intimacy that showing can't.
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions