12-02-2011, 05:06 AM
Todd, I think we need to bottle you 
A discussion is always valuable, sometimes moreso than a line-by-line. I think you're absolutely right about the second strophe in (v) and I'll make that change right away.
The kyrielle was the last piece of this that I wrote and I keep wondering if it's too obvious -- I am at my least comfortable writing autobiographical stuff, but sometimes you've just got to. Let me get my thoughts together on it, now that your comments have crystallised a few things.
The virelai (vii) was the first of these I wrote, well before I was ready to revisit and write out certain unpleasant memories. That was around about the time I first accepted and identified myself to others as "a poet" and realised my contempt for those (mostly ex-in laws) who'd made me feel ashamed of what I did best. In that way it relates back to (vi) but I think I need to find a link there since it does seem quite a leap now that you've pointed it out -- obviously in my head it makes perfect sense!
I'm reluctant to fill in too many blanks here, lest I prejudice any other readings, but I might just send you a quick PM to see if what I had in mind in a few bits makes sense in the context, or whether it just doesn't work without some more support.
A discussion is always valuable, sometimes moreso than a line-by-line. I think you're absolutely right about the second strophe in (v) and I'll make that change right away.
The kyrielle was the last piece of this that I wrote and I keep wondering if it's too obvious -- I am at my least comfortable writing autobiographical stuff, but sometimes you've just got to. Let me get my thoughts together on it, now that your comments have crystallised a few things.
The virelai (vii) was the first of these I wrote, well before I was ready to revisit and write out certain unpleasant memories. That was around about the time I first accepted and identified myself to others as "a poet" and realised my contempt for those (mostly ex-in laws) who'd made me feel ashamed of what I did best. In that way it relates back to (vi) but I think I need to find a link there since it does seem quite a leap now that you've pointed it out -- obviously in my head it makes perfect sense!
I'm reluctant to fill in too many blanks here, lest I prejudice any other readings, but I might just send you a quick PM to see if what I had in mind in a few bits makes sense in the context, or whether it just doesn't work without some more support.
It could be worse