11-29-2011, 02:38 PM
Hi Daw,
Despite your assurances that you lack skill, you have displayed a lot of it. I smiled as I read your poem and was glad at the end that you didn't wish to include the last stanza- good choice. Your work is very fresh and whether you meant it or not, the title is a punch line and justifies the refrain though it doesn't need it.
Glad to see you posting and don't be shy about giving your thoughts on others work. It will be greatly appreciated. Again, welcome to The Pig Pen
Despite your assurances that you lack skill, you have displayed a lot of it. I smiled as I read your poem and was glad at the end that you didn't wish to include the last stanza- good choice. Your work is very fresh and whether you meant it or not, the title is a punch line and justifies the refrain though it doesn't need it.
Glad to see you posting and don't be shy about giving your thoughts on others work. It will be greatly appreciated. Again, welcome to The Pig Pen