exposed

[heslopian]

I, naked before glass; she Not sure I like the comma after "I"; the fragment feels incomplete somehow. Would "I sit naked" sound better?
unfolds her shadows.
Cloth-caught, her moonlight echoes
pull, tide-twisting. I am drawn.
Razor tongue slices, drip
lick, groan and touch of
flesh, breathe.
I am she is me and we
are burning.

The narrative reminded me vaguely of the portion of The Story of O I read on amazon recently, before deciding it wasn't a book I'd like Otherwise though a good read. The last sentence is a wonderful play on language, conveying well the sense of two identities melting into one.