11-12-2011, 07:55 PM
after a few reads i think it's great. leanne pointed a few nits out.
i can't add to it. a letter from the grave and it works well in it's sadness.
babyhood threw me though i know it's a word and fits, so it must be me. i did enjoy the poem a lot,
i thought L3, and 4, honestly poignant. never noticed the end rhymes, and the end couplet did it's job well.
no suggestions here, just thanks, for the read.
i can't add to it. a letter from the grave and it works well in it's sadness.
babyhood threw me though i know it's a word and fits, so it must be me. i did enjoy the poem a lot,
i thought L3, and 4, honestly poignant. never noticed the end rhymes, and the end couplet did it's job well.
no suggestions here, just thanks, for the read.