11-11-2011, 07:22 AM
Thanks for the feedback, and soldiering on through this poem, grannyjill
I like classic horror movies from an age before the BOO! machine, where a loud music chord is suddenly played to startle the audience, took over, cheapening and making the genre (for me) unenjoyable.
"Telly" as used in reference to poetry is an abbreviation of "telling". When you "tell" in a poem you flatly state something instead of using your craft to show the reader what you mean. I can see how those lines you mentioned are "telly" (a word also used to mean television in my neck of the woods too) and will have a think about how I can change them. Thanks again for your thoughtful feedback, and sorry I scared you
I like classic horror movies from an age before the BOO! machine, where a loud music chord is suddenly played to startle the audience, took over, cheapening and making the genre (for me) unenjoyable."Telly" as used in reference to poetry is an abbreviation of "telling". When you "tell" in a poem you flatly state something instead of using your craft to show the reader what you mean. I can see how those lines you mentioned are "telly" (a word also used to mean television in my neck of the woods too) and will have a think about how I can change them. Thanks again for your thoughtful feedback, and sorry I scared you
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe