11-02-2011, 05:25 AM 
	
	
	Thank you, Phil. There are,I think, 20 'and's out of 68 words, so yes, not something likely to set a fashion, and yes, a bit forced.

It swings along quite happily to me, including the bit which tripped you up -- maybe different accents? or ways of speaking?
Thanks for taking the trouble to crit.

 

 
