And...
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Thank you, Phil. There are,I think, 20 'and's out of 68 words, so yes, not something likely to set a fashion, and yes, a bit forced. Wink

It swings along quite happily to me, including the bit which tripped you up -- maybe different accents? or ways of speaking?

Thanks for taking the trouble to crit.
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And... - by abu nuwas - 11-01-2011, 07:22 AM
RE: And... - by billy - 11-01-2011, 04:39 PM
RE: And... - by abu nuwas - 11-01-2011, 10:05 PM
RE: And... - by Philatone - 11-02-2011, 04:53 AM
RE: And... - by abu nuwas - 11-02-2011, 05:25 AM
RE: And... - by billy - 11-02-2011, 07:28 AM



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