And...

[Philatone]

hello abu!

And I was there, and you were there ..I liked the intro. reminded me of movie scenes from waking up in dreams
And then you went away....

And then you went away, and left me here
And here I chose to stay;

And will you come again, and shall I know? ..I got a bit tangled in the rhythm, with that extra "and" before shall
And might you be a dream?

And why do these flitting colours come and go,
And why so haunting seem? ..bit forced. could it show a bit more? i think the poem as a whole could be more powerful if it did

And, and and, and and, and and,
And...... ..do you need the ellipsis?

just my quick thoughts. I enjoyed the read, but I don't think the style lends it a lot of lasting power (which is not a bad thing necessarily). something you can read and move on from quickly if you desire.