10-31-2011, 11:09 PM
Okay, so I looked this up: http://physics.yale.edu/asteroid-named-h...-1988-2011
and it's a great idea for a poem. I love the title.
What I suggest you do though is add more specific detail to link the story to the poem. Any specifics you can find on her life to blend into the poem would help. Without prior knowledge there is not enough in your poem to draw people to the story. It's a good idea though I think it just needs more specifc detail to pull off.
Best,
Todd
and it's a great idea for a poem. I love the title.
What I suggest you do though is add more specific detail to link the story to the poem. Any specifics you can find on her life to blend into the poem would help. Without prior knowledge there is not enough in your poem to draw people to the story. It's a good idea though I think it just needs more specifc detail to pull off.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson