10-31-2011, 04:29 PM
I had no idea what Asteroid 15338 was before I read your poem and, now that I have, I still have no idea what Asteroid 15338 is.
The poem seems pretty good to me. I like the line breaks, and I like your free rhyming...(can't think of a better way to describe what you have done here)
For now you lie.......inquisitive eye
between/seen/keen
Many people like pared down verse but I would have liked a little more to savour.
The poem seems pretty good to me. I like the line breaks, and I like your free rhyming...(can't think of a better way to describe what you have done here)
For now you lie.......inquisitive eye
between/seen/keen
Many people like pared down verse but I would have liked a little more to savour.