10-30-2011, 02:53 PM
i don't think it needs a warning.
the content somehow negate any feedback it may get.
would you put a brick in a stocking or a sock? i doubt a stocking with a brick in it
would last long
the 'but still' at the end of the fourth carries so much.
it read like a statement, as it should and it feels real.
i see you're still with ee cumin as afr as caps go hehe.
i enjoyed the poem, sorry i can't give you anything constructive as to how to improve it.
okay if i must; where you say "kicking off a dog" would "kicking of a terrier" or something more defined, work better?
thanks for the read.
the content somehow negate any feedback it may get.
would you put a brick in a stocking or a sock? i doubt a stocking with a brick in it
would last long
the 'but still' at the end of the fourth carries so much.
it read like a statement, as it should and it feels real.
i see you're still with ee cumin as afr as caps go hehe.
i enjoyed the poem, sorry i can't give you anything constructive as to how to improve it.
okay if i must; where you say "kicking off a dog" would "kicking of a terrier" or something more defined, work better?
thanks for the read.