10-29-2011, 03:46 PM
Thanks, Todd
Now, I understand. You are saying some lines are 'padding' to fill out the story, in the same way that some words in a line of poetry are there simply to ensure that the rhythm works (but don't add to the poem's appeal). Yes?
This poem is a small story. I could trim a few bits off (I will go away and try it) But, if there is no noticeable difference then I think they will be allowed to stay.
I would value your input on my mish-mash style. I jump in and out of rhyme, and conform to traditional rhythm sometimes and then not at other times. I like writing like this, but I don't know if it is detrimental to the finished verse.
Now, I understand. You are saying some lines are 'padding' to fill out the story, in the same way that some words in a line of poetry are there simply to ensure that the rhythm works (but don't add to the poem's appeal). Yes?
This poem is a small story. I could trim a few bits off (I will go away and try it) But, if there is no noticeable difference then I think they will be allowed to stay.
I would value your input on my mish-mash style. I jump in and out of rhyme, and conform to traditional rhythm sometimes and then not at other times. I like writing like this, but I don't know if it is detrimental to the finished verse.