The Storm

[addy]

I do love nature poems. A lot of your descriptions were spot-on and set up an effective atmosphere. I was very fond of your little touches, especially the postman. Just a few comments that might help:

"A normal lazy summer afternoon" is simply not a good opening line. It doesn't pique the interest enough, and is a bit cliche... consider rephrasing it, or just making l2 your first line as it holds more interest.

I think I would have liked more descriptions of the storm itself, seeing as the build-up to it was quite extensive and dramatic (and well done, I thought). Aside from "bringing relief from summer's heat", what else did it do? It might just be my personal preference though, and is only a minor comment on my part

Thanks very much for the read jill