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The Storm
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10-29-2011, 08:45 AM
Sorry Jill not meaning to be unclear. I think when you stay with the descriptive action of the poem it works better. Obviously there is a narrative here, but there are also some lines that while they would sound good in fiction feel like overly telly asides to me. They stand out more like transitional filler (clearly that could just be my opinion).
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
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The Storm - by grannyjill - 10-28-2011, 04:40 PM
RE: The Storm - by billy - 10-28-2011, 08:38 PM
RE: The Storm - by abu nuwas - 10-29-2011, 01:07 AM
RE: The Storm - by grannyjill - 10-29-2011, 03:51 AM
RE: The Storm - by Wildcard - 10-29-2011, 03:53 AM
RE: The Storm - by Todd - 10-29-2011, 04:50 AM
RE: The Storm - by grannyjill - 10-29-2011, 05:05 AM
RE: The Storm - by abu nuwas - 10-29-2011, 06:01 AM
RE: The Storm - by grannyjill - 10-29-2011, 06:32 AM
RE: The Storm - by Todd - 10-29-2011, 08:45 AM
RE: The Storm - by addy - 10-29-2011, 09:25 AM
RE: The Storm - by grannyjill - 10-29-2011, 03:46 PM
RE: The Storm - by billy - 10-30-2011, 12:54 PM
RE: The Storm - by grannyjill - 10-31-2011, 03:00 PM
RE: The Storm - by Todd - 10-31-2011, 11:19 PM
RE: The Storm - by Wildcard - 11-01-2011, 02:53 AM
RE: The Storm - by abu nuwas - 11-01-2011, 03:38 AM
RE: The Storm - by Todd - 11-01-2011, 03:59 AM
RE: The Storm - by grannyjill - 11-01-2011, 04:17 AM
RE: The Storm - by Wildcard - 11-01-2011, 04:58 AM
RE: The Storm - by Todd - 11-01-2011, 04:59 AM
RE: The Storm - by Ca ne fait rien - 11-01-2011, 07:18 AM
RE: The Storm - by billy - 11-01-2011, 04:00 PM
RE: The Storm - by grannyjill - 11-01-2011, 04:16 PM
RE: The Storm - by billy - 11-01-2011, 04:25 PM
RE: The Storm - by addy - 11-01-2011, 04:53 PM
RE: The Storm - by grannyjill - 11-01-2011, 05:33 PM
RE: The Storm - by billy - 11-01-2011, 06:23 PM
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