the libertine's suicide note

[heslopian]

Thanks for the feedback, Bilbo and Addy I used ampersands simply because I like how they look. The informality mixed with classical terms like "Grecian art" and "Adonises" amuses me. I like the rawness of it. I still used commas and full stops in order to indicate pauses. It was about stripping the grammar down to its most basic elements, using only what I felt was absolutely necessary. If it's a problem I'll think about changing it.
As for the football teams, that was inspired by a story I heard about the American actor Rock Hudson, in which he supposedly shagged an entire football team I guess I must have forgotten the tangent I'd intended as I was writing. I'll see if I can replace it with something more suited to the other imagery. Thanks again guys