10-28-2011, 04:40 PM
The Storm (revised 31/10/2011)
An English village slept in August's fiery heat,
flattened by the lead-filled atmosphere.
Ash-grey skies, splattered with light, heard
bass drums roll as Titans clashed.
Surely The End of the World was Nigh.
A postman pausing, leaned his bike
against the once-white picket fence
to take off his cap to wipe his brow.
The oppressive heat was stifling now.
Suddenly, as from a cliff-high cataract,
cascading waters crashed loudly down
bouncing off tarmaced, dusty roads.
Sleepy drains, taken by surprise,
swallowed, then disgorged the rain again
to gush in torrents down arid streets,
bringing relief from summer's heat.
- As quickly as it came, it went -
A squelching paperboy appeared
clutching sodden papers in his hand
hair plastered dark upon his head,
looking bewildered and a little lost
at Mother Nature's demonstration
of who truly on this earth is boss.
The Storm (Original)
A normal lazy summer afternoon.
A desultory, hazy, airless day,
with leaden atmosphere weighing down
pressing relentlessly, oppressively,
creating a feeling of vague unease.
The sky was filled with peculiar light,
as flashes of yellow darted across.
Bass drums rolled and Titans clashed.
Surely The End of the World was Nigh.
The postman pausing, leaned his bike
against the once-white picket fence
to take off his cap to wipe his brow.
The oppressive heat was stifling now.
Suddenly, as from a cliff-high cataract,
cascading waters crashed loudly down
bouncing off tarmaced, dusty roads.
Sleepy drains, taken by surprise,
swallowed, then disgorged the rain again
to gush in torrents down arid streets,
bringing relief from summer's heat.
- As quickly as it came, it went -
A squelching paperboy appeared
clutching sodden papers in his hand
his hair plastered dark upon his head,
looking bewildered and a little lost
at Mother Nature's demonstration
of who truly on this earth is boss.
(This needs help I know....I think my use of 'gerunds' (?) is over-done. Also I'm not sure whether to break long sentences into shorter ones. Hence the last verse being one long sentence.)
An English village slept in August's fiery heat,
flattened by the lead-filled atmosphere.
Ash-grey skies, splattered with light, heard
bass drums roll as Titans clashed.
Surely The End of the World was Nigh.
A postman pausing, leaned his bike
against the once-white picket fence
to take off his cap to wipe his brow.
The oppressive heat was stifling now.
Suddenly, as from a cliff-high cataract,
cascading waters crashed loudly down
bouncing off tarmaced, dusty roads.
Sleepy drains, taken by surprise,
swallowed, then disgorged the rain again
to gush in torrents down arid streets,
bringing relief from summer's heat.
- As quickly as it came, it went -
A squelching paperboy appeared
clutching sodden papers in his hand
hair plastered dark upon his head,
looking bewildered and a little lost
at Mother Nature's demonstration
of who truly on this earth is boss.
The Storm (Original)
A normal lazy summer afternoon.
A desultory, hazy, airless day,
with leaden atmosphere weighing down
pressing relentlessly, oppressively,
creating a feeling of vague unease.
The sky was filled with peculiar light,
as flashes of yellow darted across.
Bass drums rolled and Titans clashed.
Surely The End of the World was Nigh.
The postman pausing, leaned his bike
against the once-white picket fence
to take off his cap to wipe his brow.
The oppressive heat was stifling now.
Suddenly, as from a cliff-high cataract,
cascading waters crashed loudly down
bouncing off tarmaced, dusty roads.
Sleepy drains, taken by surprise,
swallowed, then disgorged the rain again
to gush in torrents down arid streets,
bringing relief from summer's heat.
- As quickly as it came, it went -
A squelching paperboy appeared
clutching sodden papers in his hand
his hair plastered dark upon his head,
looking bewildered and a little lost
at Mother Nature's demonstration
of who truly on this earth is boss.
(This needs help I know....I think my use of 'gerunds' (?) is over-done. Also I'm not sure whether to break long sentences into shorter ones. Hence the last verse being one long sentence.)