Job Centre Blues

[Philatone]

hey man
just wanted to share some thoughts. take away what you like

Job centre windows fascinate me as I wait to be called to a booth.
On metal springs they open just a small, measured distance. ..I thought about about putting a comma between "springs" and "they". I think it could make the line "springlike" as well.
I imagine they're so to prevent suicide, young mum leaping from the ledge.. this line felt rather direct for me, telling-ish, at least at the opening
on hearing that her fortnight's dole won't cover a hair extension. .. i like the tone..
I work with what I'm given. In this case the job centre, ..which continues through here. Would parentheses help bracket off the thought (I work with what I'm given), or do you want to really force it out there? Either could work, just wanted to check on the intention.
its mawkish photos of the middle-agedin a world where laziness ...like the rhythm and sounds herewas left behind by nature's scheme.
I should have brought a book along, I think as time wanders...do you need the "I think as time wanders?"
Adjacent on a low table are engineering magazines, some politics ..here, I also feel like something could be trimmed--either the "adjacent" or "on a low table".
and articles which read to me like algebra. I'm sitting in a blue armchair, ..deleting the "to me" would make the image stronger in my opinion
down a short gray corridor, ended on either side by desks, ..I like the colors going on here; could desks have one as well? just a thought-it would work with the structure of the previous lines
computers and telephones. I feel as though I'm in Yemen
(a place to which I've never been). I work with what I'm given...good finishing lines I think

a pleasant read