10-25-2011, 12:04 AM
Hi Jack,
Your poem caught me off guard for sure. The first line lead me to believe it would be an entirely different kind of poem. By the second read, I was already finding a good balance in the words. I love how the sea is large and dumb and implicitly ignorant of it's berating nature
Only one little nit, I thought 'naught' a little contrived sounding - I mean out of place kind of . . . not sure how to say it . . . JMO
Thanks for sharing.
Your poem caught me off guard for sure. The first line lead me to believe it would be an entirely different kind of poem. By the second read, I was already finding a good balance in the words. I love how the sea is large and dumb and implicitly ignorant of it's berating nature
Only one little nit, I thought 'naught' a little contrived sounding - I mean out of place kind of . . . not sure how to say it . . . JMOThanks for sharing.