10-24-2011, 11:56 AM
i like verdant in this instant, it's normally a little overused but here it's a great image.
L7, is my favourite though for me the 'I' would work better on the next line.
i think it verges on 'that side of too much to take in' but i'm sure it's just me.
perhaps if you broke it's back between L5, and 6, it would look a little less heavy. jmo
all in all a good read.
L7, is my favourite though for me the 'I' would work better on the next line.
i think it verges on 'that side of too much to take in' but i'm sure it's just me.
perhaps if you broke it's back between L5, and 6, it would look a little less heavy. jmo
all in all a good read.