10-24-2011, 08:53 AM
I would have cut my arm off before losing the exotic/erotic stanza!
This demonstrates to me one of the real blessings of poetry: the ability to go to new places, to give creativity free rein, both in content, and structure, as well as the sound.
It reminded me a little of a dance, like Hilaire Belloc's 'Tarantella'. Perhaps for that reason, I kept thinking that a definite article could be added here and there --say, before 'splatter' and again before 'black-and-white'. Maybe Belloc's 'bees that tease' started me down this track, as you also had 'tease' in the Satanic Verse.
It had not occurred to me previously, but I suppose that sexual imagery is by its nature strong, and when at the beginning, wakes the reader up, and heightens perceptions of what follows. I don't know whether there was a deliberate reference to 'Sein und Zeit', tied then in with Zeitgeist, but it made me smile. I also thought a little about the nature of Zeitgeist-- as expressed in fashion, it appears tyrannical, yet the mere fact of its fleeting and ever-changing nature, is a great liberator from shackles of all sorts.
Hope you had your flag out when cheering on Her Majesty.
Well done again, Leanne, exceptionally so.
This demonstrates to me one of the real blessings of poetry: the ability to go to new places, to give creativity free rein, both in content, and structure, as well as the sound.
It reminded me a little of a dance, like Hilaire Belloc's 'Tarantella'. Perhaps for that reason, I kept thinking that a definite article could be added here and there --say, before 'splatter' and again before 'black-and-white'. Maybe Belloc's 'bees that tease' started me down this track, as you also had 'tease' in the Satanic Verse.
It had not occurred to me previously, but I suppose that sexual imagery is by its nature strong, and when at the beginning, wakes the reader up, and heightens perceptions of what follows. I don't know whether there was a deliberate reference to 'Sein und Zeit', tied then in with Zeitgeist, but it made me smile. I also thought a little about the nature of Zeitgeist-- as expressed in fashion, it appears tyrannical, yet the mere fact of its fleeting and ever-changing nature, is a great liberator from shackles of all sorts.
Hope you had your flag out when cheering on Her Majesty.
Well done again, Leanne, exceptionally so.