10-24-2011, 06:28 AM
Whose deceit? No matter how honest we think we're being, the persona of typed words on an instantly refreshed page is never the whole picture. See, your poem's set me to thinking, and I am happy about that 
I would probably do a small edit and have "fragile, calcified" instead but that's me. The last line, while I agree with billy that it's a cliche, is a cliche in the right spot because my sense of irony automatically shifts it to "wanting love is rarely enough" (don't put that in the poem though!)
After ten years or so of dealing with poets on the internet, have I got some stories to tell you!
I would probably do a small edit and have "fragile, calcified" instead but that's me. The last line, while I agree with billy that it's a cliche, is a cliche in the right spot because my sense of irony automatically shifts it to "wanting love is rarely enough" (don't put that in the poem though!)After ten years or so of dealing with poets on the internet, have I got some stories to tell you!
It could be worse