10-20-2011, 09:22 PM
Thanks everyone for the kind comments and feedback-
Billy- yes the bits of 'the' you suggest shall be removed, fewer words that don't count the better.
Aish- thanks-my day jobs are concerned with poking about in the past, so I write about it quite a lot.
In case you are unfamiliar with it- the allusion to Jerusalem here is from the anthem , these days sung mainly by the Women's Institute and held in contrast to the realities of Industrial Revolution England.
Addy- If you haven't been, make him bring you- it is the land of Ted Hughes as well
Billy- yes the bits of 'the' you suggest shall be removed, fewer words that don't count the better.
Aish- thanks-my day jobs are concerned with poking about in the past, so I write about it quite a lot.
In case you are unfamiliar with it- the allusion to Jerusalem here is from the anthem , these days sung mainly by the Women's Institute and held in contrast to the realities of Industrial Revolution England.
Addy- If you haven't been, make him bring you- it is the land of Ted Hughes as well