On Eggshells:

[addy]

Hey billy, commenting on the edit Just a few issues, but overall nice job. A ver stouthearted poem.

A worth of monuments is naught: To break the yoke! This is a strong opening, but there's something wrong with it grammatically, I think? Maybe it's the colon, it implies a direct connection between the statement "a worth off monuments..." and "to break the yoke" when there probably isn't (the second statement is more connected with the next line, as I understood it).
The soldiers gave, till death they fought to break the yoke.

Them Niggers always on the march like army ants. I think you can say "negroes", which, though dated and not pretty, seems less venomous from the narrator's perspective. Just a thought
Enduring pain in hope, they sought to break the yoke.

Will Arab spring be dry above the desert son? Nice pun
Can dictators all; be tried, brought to break the yoke?

Sweatshops in down town New York! Do they still exist?
Reebok, Nike, others; they ought to break the yoke. Like the sense of the line, but I feel "they ought to" sounds rather weak.

And what of us, are we confined to merely watch?
Can we create a bill with thought to break the yoke? If I'm understanding this correctly, then "create a bill" sounds terribly weak for me, imo