Being Cool

[billy]

I used to think pretending to like
only bands thought of as cool -
The Clash, Nirvana, Joy Division -
and despising white bread pop
would make me a better person. i think the 1st could do with some images

When the albums spun their way
through songs of drink and drugs
(I eating a custard cream)
it felt as though coolness had come
to let me suck its golden cock. (this one has some good images. 5 of them )

Countless failures have proved is 'have" needed?
listening to Girls Aloud, Kenny G
or Cher has no effect on cleverness, would 'or' or 'or cher' work better on the line above?
regardless what the cool kids say. could cool be another word cos of the repetition?
Life doesn't care if you wear a mohawk. this is my fave line

Play the X-Ray Spex all day,
you still had a wank over Phillip Schofield,
busted in your clean bedsheets
while great men worked to cure cancer.
Men who probably liked The Osmonds. this stanza is a solid ending

the 1st stanza felt a little weak compared to the rest of the poem. the narrative was good but didn't hold my attention in the 1st as it did in the rest of the piece. (i think because it lacked something solid.) what did the clash do? how did nirvana rock?)
i thought the last and 2nd stanza rocked better than nirvana. though the x ray spex lost me i actually liked the line hehe.
like i said, if you make the 1st stanza hold an image or two i think it'll be a winner. jmo
thanks for the read.