The Ant

[Philatone]

Hey Patrick!

Climbing up my naked leg,
this intrepid ant should be
squashed flat for his temerity. ..I find your word choice interesting. the shift from words like "intrepid" and "temerity" (among others in the poem) did not mix well with "squashed" for me.
My hand is poised above the brake of hair .."brake of hair" is great
in which the struggling pilgrim tickles me. ..don't understand the "struggling". can it be shown? is he having a hard time climbing?
Ignorance has surely led him there,
which must explain why I still hesitate
to end his foolish trek-- ..why "foolish"?
as hopeless as my own. [b]..going to agree with billy on this last line as being a little lacking. I think another line or two may make it work. Having more comparisons between you and the ant might better incorporate it into the poem

i found myself just a little unsure about why you used several adjectives/ word choice in general. Overall, the poem made me smile; it's a relatable, light topic