10-17-2011, 02:50 PM
fair point, but when i read it i use the meter in my head 
of course that means jack shit cos my meter is crap but....
i'm pretty sure i got the meter the way you intended.
the verse in question reminds (meter-wise of famous poem, so famous, i can't remember it
)
it may be one of the lines from poe's raven
And the raven,
never flitting,
still is sitting, still is sitting
On the pallid
bust of Pallas
just above my chamber door
though it's writ differently.
of course sonics often change a poem completely
of course that means jack shit cos my meter is crap but....
i'm pretty sure i got the meter the way you intended.
the verse in question reminds (meter-wise of famous poem, so famous, i can't remember it
)it may be one of the lines from poe's raven
And the raven,
never flitting,
still is sitting, still is sitting
On the pallid
bust of Pallas
just above my chamber door
though it's writ differently.
of course sonics often change a poem completely