10-17-2011, 12:22 PM
Very interesting write... the language is polished and controlled, and perfectly balanced between emotive and thoughtful. I love how you've phrased certain things, like "brake of hair". I found the ending poignant as well, and saw it more as a possible parallel to the relation-chasm between god and man... at least, the sobering and not so pretty version.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?