10-13-2011, 05:42 PM
what a brave edit to remove a stanza, and for me it works better without it.
i also think the edit to the last four limes help improve the piece. i'll change my mind about the cliche remark (sea and sky)
it reads well within the poem and to be honest i can't think of a suggestion to improve it.
great edit stef.
i also think the edit to the last four limes help improve the piece. i'll change my mind about the cliche remark (sea and sky)
it reads well within the poem and to be honest i can't think of a suggestion to improve it.
great edit stef.