Going Away Party

[Philatone]

Hey man,
just wanted to let you know my thoughts.

bitter fog mingles with tilted stones --dramatic, I will give you that.
whose worn inscriptions --the "whose" here drags out the scene. now, in a sense, it reinforces the "worn" of this stanza, but I think it also brings with it a loss of energy and agency.
chuckle at strangers

for within my sarcophagus --need the "for?
tasting petulance,
feral urges loiter --this is a deep word here with all of the possible meanings

summoned to the dance,
I slip into the Stygian
like cool, clean sheets ---this could be stronger as a metaphor rather than a simile-- for instance, making "Stygian" possessive and dropping the "like". I don't think it would lose its effect. it is a good image as is too!

in terms of comments, I don't have much to add down here. I do feel like this is a poem that could benefit from another stanza or two, preferably somewhere around the middle stanza (either before or after). I like the last stanza especially