Autumn Paintbrush - Revised/rewritten

[Leanne]

Stef, you're not going to like me very much... but your edited version is a lot more "tell" than "show", especially the changes to the second stanza, and I think you've really lost the depth that the immediacy of "sprouting winter wheat exhales" contrasted with "in the church, tattered banners hold..." was giving the poem.

I do like "frills the edge of castled clouds" though