10-10-2011, 01:03 AM
heslopian
(10-08-2011, 10:10 AM)Heslopian Wrote: Lamplight mixes with pitch black --great [i] sounds!this is a lovely shade of dark right here, heslopian. nicely written. sorry i can't be more helpful
to make a mournful shade of day, --this and the line above are great lines, nice imagery
driving madness from the earth.
Lamplight mixes with pitch black
in hollows false as human hearts,
the void disturbed by neon flames.
Lamplight mixes with pitch black
to make a mournful shade of day.
Written only for you to consider.