10-08-2011, 12:28 PM
(at least) one last thank you to your feedback! this especially was a piece that was difficult for me alone to make changes to as I was blind--also shows one of the reasons why I'm so happy to have found the boards. I'm glad this poem was able to strike at least some chord with you.
stylistically, I think altering the question marks does make sense; how does no punctuation seem for the first three stanzas? I think it would work. also stylistically, I'm more of a fan of starting lines with capitals, though I realize it can be distracting to some people; that's one decision I would prefer to stand firm on for this piece.
you've all offered me such wonderful responses. please know I appreciate it
stylistically, I think altering the question marks does make sense; how does no punctuation seem for the first three stanzas? I think it would work. also stylistically, I'm more of a fan of starting lines with capitals, though I realize it can be distracting to some people; that's one decision I would prefer to stand firm on for this piece.
you've all offered me such wonderful responses. please know I appreciate it
Written only for you to consider.