If you want to deal with inscribed, here are some thoughts.
I agree with you that Book of Life seems too much. A couple of possilbe options:
A) Leave it as is
B) Maybe expand on the wild fig, apples, nature images with the Tree of Life I don't think directly just finding a way to allude to it.
C) In the apocalyptic books they have phrasing about a name written (inscribed) upon the thigh
D) There are some biblical verses that talk about our names being written (or carved in some translations) on the palms of God's hands.
E) You could make some push back to Jewish law and the stone tablets
Just some thoughts, I'm not sure where I would go with it but my mind seems to lead in those directions.
I agree with you that Book of Life seems too much. A couple of possilbe options:
A) Leave it as is
B) Maybe expand on the wild fig, apples, nature images with the Tree of Life I don't think directly just finding a way to allude to it.
C) In the apocalyptic books they have phrasing about a name written (inscribed) upon the thigh
D) There are some biblical verses that talk about our names being written (or carved in some translations) on the palms of God's hands.
E) You could make some push back to Jewish law and the stone tablets
Just some thoughts, I'm not sure where I would go with it but my mind seems to lead in those directions.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson